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Review:ChaosWednesday says:
hey, Whiskey from the forums here with your review!

ok some tiny typos I noticed:
-"and he WAVED and he CAVED" I think you meant CURSED? ;)
- is it death or the wolf? You seem to use both...I don't know if that was intentional...
-"when he me a wizard" forgot the "t" :P

This story is really cute! The Peverell brothers are totally like the three little pigs. Now we know where our beloved JK got the inspiration ;)

One thing I noticed though: since this is a fairytale structure, you need some moral. And I don't really see why death would want anything from the pigs, uh, I mean brothers (except that they would die of cold without a house?). Maybe replace death with someone who would actually lose something if people got free houses (like one of those fat caricature capitalists with a monocle...or maybe a robber? or, you know, a dragon. dragons are a multifunctional symbol of badness. Or, haha, ok I'm totally on a role: use Voldemort! He just likes killing people, so it would make sense for him to be after the brothers.)

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for reviewing!
First, I've went back and changed the typos, so thanks for that! :)
I've also changed death to Voldemort so thanks for the ideas!
Once again, thanks for the review! :)


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