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Review:manno_malfoy says:
Hi! I'm here with your requested review.

I've heard a lot about this story and it surely has be on my big list of stories to read! Therefore, I'm glad that I finally got to because it seems really interesting.

You wanted an opinion on the relationship between the brothers, right? The way I see it, despite the stiff interactions and everything, they seem to have a semi-normal brotherly relationship. While Sirius tries to detach himself from his family, when he comes to an obstacle, he finds it easier to ask his brother for his wand instead of telling his parents that he needs new shoes. It shows that they still have some sort of regard for each other and that, at certain times, they rely on each other like brothers normally would.

I really liked how you've portrayed Sirius. He's this headstrong young man who, despite his knowledge of how his parents don't approve of the way he thinks or the way he does things, doesn't have a problem reinforcing his beliefs and making sure they know where he stands. He seemed quite faithful to canon and I can't wait to see what else you're going to have him do.

I also liked your portrayal of Regulus. I don't think I've ever read a story that had Regulus as an active character, but I really like yours. He seems like the perfect pureblood elitist.

I think the way you've started the chapter was rather nice and really fits the meticulous and calculating tone of the story. First, you start with inanimate objects like the house and the portraits, then you went ahead to the cat and the house-elves, until you finally reached one of the two main characters of the story. It seemed very organised and I liked it.

Regarding the issue of favouratism between the brothers... It is obvious that Orion and Walburga regard Regulus with more pride and consideration. But that is only normal! He was in Slytherin like any other member of the family and he did not make it his daily mission to upset his parents or do something on purpose because he knows it would annoy them.

Also, I didn't feel that they treated Sirius too cruelly. He made them feel like he could manage things on his own and they apparently let him do as he pleased. It isn't like they locked him up in a cupboard under the stairs and completely isolated him from them. It all seemed very natural and that the favouratism wasn't overdone.

Everything so far looks amazing and intriguing. The way you arrange your words and describe things makes the scenes very rich and easy to see. I hope to have the time to read more of this story. But you go on and keep up the great work! Good luck with the rest of the story.

-Manno

Author's Response: Hello! Thank you for coming by :)

Wow, I'm pleasantly surprised that you've heard about this, and I'm glad that you've been wanting to come and check it out!

I'm really happy that you liked my portrayals of the Black brothers. I've tried to break away from the stereotypes a little with this story, which is why I was a bit concerned about this chapter. I really wanted the tension in the house to seem present but not over the top. I think at this point, with Regulus not having gone over to the "dark side" just yet, there could still have been some hope for a brotherly relationship between him and Sirius. I'm glad you picked up on the details about his shoes and the wand and Sirius preferring to deal with Regulus rather than his parents.

I'm happy that you liked the opener, too. It was kind of fun to work from the microchasm of the house elves' point of view and start off a relatively dark chapter with a bit of humor, courtesy of the ever so charming Kreacher! :) I'm pleased that things seemed to work in a hierarchical manner for you, because that's exactly how they seemed to unfold for me when I was originally writing this chapter.

It's great to hear that the favoritism didn't seem too overdone. I wanted it to be clear, like you said, that Regulus is the favorite without the story devolving into full-on abuse of Sirius. It's good that you can still tell that his parents aren't fond of him, though, because that's definitely an important theme.

Thanks so much for your really kind review! Your comments were very helpful and thorough, and I hope you don't mind if I re-request for more chapters from you :)

-Amanda


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