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Review:maskedmuggle says:
Hey! Ahh I loved this! This was so fantastic! I really loved the direction you took with this! It's so interesting to read a story with Susan as the main character, as she's such a minor character she rarely even appears in many stories. I loved her characterisation - her worries and needing to get away after the war. I also loved how she had a dragonologist brother and it was lovely to see a good relationship between the two even though I'd usually expect distance because of the years apart (in age and in seeing each other).

Plotwise, I especially enjoyed the end, but the dream at the start was great too. I thought the random dragons appearing were slightly random and didn't make too much sense, unlike Voldemort & co killing her family (which makes total and normal sense to be a nightmare for her). Even though you mentioned the dragon breeds that way, I think it would have flowed better to mention them somehow when she was in Romania. Apart from that though - I loved how you managed to incorporate all the prompts! I was especially impressed with how you included the dragon's blood, details of the wand and the dark detectors!

I loved the scene at the end with the going-crazy Ukrainian Ironbelly. It was such a great idea to have Bradley on the back and Susan coming to save the day with a simple transfiguration idea. All in all, a really well-written story that I enjoyed reading! :)

- Charlotte

Author's Response: Hi Charlotte! Aww, it's so sweet of you to come review this story! Thanks so much for taking the time to give this great review :)

I knew absolutely nothing about Susan when we picked her as champion, which is a fun thing, I think, because it allows a lot of freedom for characterization. I'm glad you liked her here! I like seeing characters defy expectations and push past their insecurites/worries, so I thought I'd focus a bit on that with this story. And Bradley was fun to write, even though he didn't get much time--I just think he'd be a fun person to meet in real life :)

I see what you're saying about the dragons. I sort of wanted to create a chaotic atmosphere with the dream, and dragons seemed like an easy way to do that. But I definitely could have gone that other way, and mentioned Susan seeing them in person in Romania. Sometime it's hard to know what will flow the best *shrugs* But I'm glad you liked the other prompts! I tried to get them in seamlessly, and it's great to know I pulled it off for the most part.

That end scene was really fun to write, and I'm glad you enjoyed reading it! Again, thanks so much for a great review...I was so pleasantly suprised to see it! You made my day! :)

--Maggie



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