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Review:Chocolate_Frog says:
Hello!

As soon as I read the summary, I knew immediately that I'd have to read this--Marauders are my absolute favorite era. xD I really loved your take on this; somehow, it makes it all the more authentic that Remus would be the one to tell the story, versus just seeing it from an OC's eyes. ^__^

You managed to characterize Harry well, which is no easy feat seeing as we know so much about him and it's not hard for him to stray into the realms of OOC. Having estrablished that, I think that your Harry is exactly what post-death Harry in the books is like--saddened and eager to know more, especially now that Sirius had died.

One thing I think you could improve on is expanding on the details. Your writing is very good so far--especially the introduction paragraph, which really drew us into the atmosphere of the story, but I think fleshing out some of the parts would make it better. For example, in the dialogue where Harry talks to Remus, you could include the action--did Harry ask anxiously? Was there a crease in Remus's forehead as he talked? etc, etc. Details like this could really help the reader visualize the scene.

Overall, this was a great start so far, and I'm interested in learning more about Sophie-Elise and your take of the Marauders era! :)

~Chocolate_Frog

Author's Response: Thank you for your feedback! The Prologue was just to set the context of the story, future chapters will be more detailed and longer (I hope writer's block doesn't hit me)!

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