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Review:magnolia_magic says:
Hi! I'm here with the last review :)

I was wondering how you would pull all the characters together after introducing them all separately, and I think the POV changes worked pretty well for the most part. The only switch that seemed choppy was the very first one, from Helga to Salazar. It was a big time jump between those two sections, and it threw me a bit. If it were me, I might move Salazar's actual arrival from a fortnight to just a few days before the wedding, to make that time jump seem less sudden. But that's just my opinion, and it's a small thing :)

I'm glad Salazar and Rowena seem happy enough together. Rowena doesn't seem at all like the girl we met in the first chapter: she seems much more capable and mature, and I just wonder how that change happened. I can tell that Helga admires her a lot, and I can see her being a strong queen.

And I suppose this answers my question about who Godric would fancy! I found it really interesting that he suspects Helga might be a spy: I never would have thought of that, but it makes sense, since the two countries are at war. And if sweet, kind Helga really did have ulterior motives, that would be a really exciting twist!

I've really enjoyed reviewing this story! I think it has a lot of potential, and it's a really entertaining read. Keep working on it...I would definitely be interested in seeng more!

--Mags

Author's Response: Thanks again for the review. I will take all of your suggestions into consideration.

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