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Review:RosieQueen says:
First off, this first chapter really caught my attention. It was a great prologue because it just keeps the reader wondering how Lily managed to get herself into this mess. I kept wondering about what had happened, and that's great because now I just feel the need to read the next chapter to find out what!

I also enjoyed the detail on Lily's dream to become a journalist and how her aunt and uncle got her a photo album and a camera, and how she'd spend her time writing captions underneath the photos. It's just those interesting details that make a story feel real. :)

It was great how you conveyed Lily's character so wonderfully in just one chapter. She's quite nosy, just like an aspiring journalist should be, a bit stubborn, and bookish. The characterization of her and her family was great too, and I liked reading about how her parents and brothers had reacted. It really helped me understand the situation and the characters better.

This is a really good start! Keep on writing! :D



I'm so so glad you liked it. I do like prologues with a bit of mystery, lol. Detail and backstory is definitely some of the most fun things for me to write, so I'm glad you enjoyed that! And her characterization is a major point for me in this; she is a lot like a journalist yes. Very stubborn (but don't tell her :P)

Thank you again! Made my day!


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