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Review:CambAngst says:
Hello, again! I'm tearing it up this morning for the reviewing challenge in the House Cup and I was ecstatic to see that a new chapter of Dark Mirror was up, because, hey, it's something I would have read and reviewed anyway!

I like that you've kept up with the brutal sort of "social triage" that Godric began in the last chapter with Hermione. You're portrayed him as an avid student of the modern era. In spite of the obvious alpha male conflict between himself and Dageus, I'm sure that he was deeply curious as to how his kin are fairing in the present day. He simply lacks the time to thoroughly investigate matters. "...not the time for new beginnings, as he later says."

I have to say that you threw me for a loop with some of Dageus's inner monologue. The part about it being obvious that he was descended from Godric I can easily get my head around. Although the exact thought process that made him so certain that the mysterious man he encounters was actually the legendary, ninth-century founder of Hogwarts could have been fleshed out a bit better. When you started tossing around dark wizard souls and faerie queens, that was when things got weird for me.

Please don't take this to mean that I can't get my head around these things. I'm sure I can, given time. It's just that you introduced it all very abruptly, without even prefacing it with much detail on who Dageus is and what sort of life he lives. All in all, my preference would have been to introduce some of these concepts more gradually.

So the dark glass is more than just a prison for Godric? Now that part I can get my head around, and it's very interesting. Almost as interesting as what Hermione is going to find when she makes her way to Gryffin Castle. If she makes her way to Gryffin Castle. With Salazar's minions still pursuing her and without Godric's protection, things have just become a lot harder for her.

And through it all, the love story rolls on! Although it's most like a lust story at times. ;) Even under the most trying circumstances, she can't help but be hurt when he intimates that they don't have a future together. Then she nearly dances with joy when he makes a pointed exception just for her. I have no idea where you're taking these two in the long run. Before meeting his descendants, I didn't think there was much of a chance of Godric fitting into modern life. Now, I'm not so sure. Either way, I hope that Hermione and Godric have more "moments" coming up before this story is all said and done.

I love how he simply melts her with looks and short sentences. She's even imagining their children already! So is so smitten, yet he still finds her difficult to approach, in a way. They're such a good couple!

I couldn't find a thing wrong with this chapter in terms of typos or spelling or grammatical problems. I thought it all flowed really nicely, and it was easy to follow even though I'm reading it in a hurry! Love the story, can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. I look forward to your insight every time I post a new chapter. Just so you know the next chapter is currently in the queue and should be up within the next day or so. Thanks for pointing out that bit about Dageus. I had so many ideas running through my mind when I was writing that chapter that I will admit I got a bit ahead of myself. I have already gone back and fixed the problem and the edited version should be available soon. With only a few more chapters to go before the story is at an end I have been trying to put more information about the mirror and how Godric was trapped into the story line. I am always worried that I am not putting enough information to keep the reader informed, but at the same time I am worried that I might be giving too much away too early. I am glad that you think that everything is flowing well and that the pace is going good.

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