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Review:Jchrissy says:
Dom is so bratty/hostile that she make for an amazing narrative voice! I think you are doing a very good job with first person. I find a lot of people having difficulty with tenses from with it, but you didn't falter!

Can you blame her for throwing herself in the seat? She basically is eating rabbit food, she might as well give it to her owl (love his name, btw). Poor girl should get a mountain of waffles on her birthday!

Anyway, I love how you introduced her, and considering I'm not very up to date on next gen, I wasn't sure who she was for a bit, which I liked.

I'm not sure at this point if she'd really have enough Veela blood to be a veela, but I still love the description of it being practically impossible for them to get fat, haha!

I like also that you've shown the contrast in the families with the birthdays in France and the birthdays at the burrow. A firework in her lap?? Poor Hermione!!!

For what a hostile girl she seems to be, she's very honest with herself. At least so far. Admitting you don't know where you're going after school would be hard, but you handle it so it seems very natural for her!

So, this is great so far! I would suggest adding some more descriptions pertaining to the surroundings. You do a great job describing what the charter is doing, but I didn't really get a scenery set.

Very good first chapter! It was so much fun to read and made me want to continue!

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