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Review:eternalangel says:
I really enjoyed reading your interpretation of Roxanne Weasley's character. She is a character that is not often used in next gen stories and I always appreciate when characters like this are explored. I loved how she was characterized in this and I loved the family interactions that were shown between her and the rest of the family. You managed to get a little bit of information in about each member of the family in this, which gave each of the characters a little bit of their own flavor, shall I say. Good work on that.

The only real thing I can think to critique is that I think Afia's death and the impact it had on Roxanne was not explored as much in this. I guess I wanted to know a little bit more about the friendship that Victoire and Roxanne had since this was the impact that Afia's death caused. I also wanted to know more about what exactly happened between Roxanne and Teddy and Victoire. This may all be described in later chapters though.

Overall this was a wonderful second chapter and one that kept me interested in the story that you have created so far. Keep up the good work!

eternalangel

Author's Response: thanks for sticking with the story, about afia, victoire, teddy and everything else, i do have their history infused in chapters to come (i hope that was not a spoiler). thankyou for the critique and please keep reading and reviewing

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