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Review:Erised says:
Hey!

This was absolutely brilliant. The setting and description at the beginning of the story was just beautiful and was written excellently, making the whole story sound very ethereal which is somewhat fitting.

I also liked how you gave Cho and Cedric much more human qualities than most authors would, like the fact that she has no sense of direction and his nervousness - something we don't see in the books simply because Cedric is not the focus of the story.

The latter half of the piece really is heartbreaking to read. I really felt for Cho and what she'd been through. Her emotions really came across in this, you did this excellently.

The only thing that bothered me in the slightest was the line "A wind rustles through, ejecting small butterflies into the sky". I thought 'ejected' was a weird phrase to describe butterflies, but that's just me :P

Beautiful work!

Author's Response: Hello! Thanks so much! I really adore this pairing so it means a lot that you liked it :) I'm so glad you thought the emotions came across especially as Cedric can only have a small appearance in this and as the piece itself is quite short.

The ejecting bit was meant to describe the butterflies taking off. I guess I see how it could sound a bit strange. But I'm happy you liked the piece!

Thanks so much for reviewing!


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