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Review:StEpH_M says:
I really like this story, it's nice and to the point, admittedly at first I was a bit confused by it all, I was questioning why she would go looking for dragons and try to fight one, but after a while I understood her reasoning behind it. Her need to try and dull the pain she had been feeling ever since Cedric died. That she had to relive all her experiences with him so that maybe she could get some closer. It's definitely a different way of looking at grieving. That she is not wallowing more using actions to try and release her pain, instead of tears.

I like that through it you bought in memories of her time with Cedric of the time when he did exactly what she was doing at that moment it was a nice touch. I also liked that sort of internal dialoge, her telling herself that now wasn't the time for reminiscing, that it could be done after the impending dragon wasn't in her current vicinity. It made the story more realistic and easier to follow.

Some bits where a bit jumpy in the story and made a few section hard to follow but I think it was more a matter of wording then anything else. Otherwise this was a lovely story and I enjoyed reading it.

Great Job. W.W.W.W.W :)

- Steph

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yeah, I know, it is a bit confusing. It didn't seem that confusing when I wrote it - then I read it over and kinda went 'huh', but then of course it was too late and I didn't really have the heart to change it. I'm so glad you got it, though - the whole 'closure through experience' thing is exactly what she's doing! By imitating the tournament, she's trying to understand why he died and just how dangerous the tournament was.

I really enjoyed writing the memories of Cedric. I think if the word limit had been higher, I might have expanded on those a bit more, maybe put in a bit more detail and spread the action out a bit more... I dunno...

Yeah, I wrote it really quickly and some bits are pretty rough in place. I'm intending to go on a huge editing spree this Christmas, so beware! ;)

Thank you so much for the review and sorry the response is so late!

Aph xx

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