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Review:MalfoysCarolinaGirl2010 says:
ok first off I know there was a limited word count on the entries for the challenge but i felt it was a little too fast paced. I think you had a little too much going on at once.

Second: The characterization of everyone was done really well and I enjoyed Neville's nervousness at the beginning and his Spunk at the end. I never would have guessed Neville would willingly attack a teacher like he did. and I agree that all three were very lucky with only getting a detention when it could have been so much worse.

Third: As i've already mentioned i felt it was a little too fast paced but overall the plot development and flow were written very well and the events flowed together seamlessly.

Great Job for your first fic

Author's Response: Hey there. Thanks for stopping by and having the time to leave a review.

The fast pace of the story was kind of intentional. I know it felt like everything was too rushed but I wanted it to be that way to transmit a feeling of urgency that I felt the moment had. They had to get the sword and fast. Thank you for pointing it out though. I will be more careful with future works so as to slow it down a bit, maybe mix a bit of imagery more.

I'm glad to hear you enjoyed Neville's characterization. This aspect is one of the most important for me and I always fret over it. So it's a pleasure to hear that it came across as real and believable :)

Thanks for reading once again. You made me very happy!


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