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Review:Aphoride says:
Haha, I loved this! Gosh, you need to write more - than I can read and review more! Win-win situation, yeah? ;)

Anyway, this was really good. It was less introspective than the first chapter, which was good, and it sped along at a nice pace - not too fast, but it's not going slowly either.

Poor Parker. Cleaning three week old jelly... :P Rather him than me, lol. He seems like an interesting character, you know - a bit strong-and-silent, maybe shy? Obviously not stupid and very talented... hm... I dunno, he just seems interesting.

Lily is wonderful! She's definitely inherited Ginny's spunk, that's for sure! At the same time, though, she's really nice and very competitive at the same time, which good. It's a lovely mix of traits and I can imagine some of them are going to cause trouble later on.

Anthony... what to say about Anthony... he seems lovely. Very lovely, if a bit arrogant. Then again, he did try to be nice, it's not his fault if Parker doesn't know what to do when being chatted at by a man in a towel. Yeah, I'm on his side :P

I did notice, though, that there was one paragraph where you changed to 'her', rather than 'me', which obviously didn't fit. If you have a quick look over it again, you'll find it I'm sure!

Ah, I really enjoyed this. It's really funny to think of interns cleaning out lockers and getting lost... I'm curious to see where you go with this and what else Joey makes them do :D

Aph xx

House Cup 2012! Go 'Claws!

Author's Response: Awww thanks so much for the nice review :D

I'm glad that you like Parker. I think you hit his personality spot on, although I'll get a little bit more into his character as the story goes on. I think I said this in my last response, but again Lily is really fun to write. Shes got that bit of Ginny in her, but at the same time I feel like she is her own person. You know?

And then there is Anthony. How could anyone not love Anthony right? Its not a party until the professional quidditch player shows up in a bathing towel :P.

Sorry about the typo. I do have a beta now, but he hasn't worked through all of the chapters yet (or really any yet), but we're getting there :)

Again thanks for the review this totally made my day.

-Liz


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