|Review:||The Last Marauder says:|
FINALLY YES! Makes my day when I see you've updated!
Loved Sirius looking out for this brother, that was really nice. You saw how much he does care about him, and the sad thing is that we all know that in the end the boys just go their separate ways. Also the exchange with James about shaving made me laugh so much. It was brilliant writing.
Em... If I am honest with you, I didn't like Remus's chapter much - mostly because Dumbledore would have ensured that no matter what, Lupin couldn't escape the Shack during the full-moon, so I just didn't find the idea that Remus could splinter the door and get out realistic. I'd imagine the shack is magically protected too, it's not just boarded up windows and doors keeping Remus inside. Fred and George tried everything to get in, remember, and couldn't? I just don't think Dumbledore would leave anything to chance, and run the risk of Remus getting out. He's the most powerful wizard in the world, and I doubt a werewolf is stronger than Dumbledore's protective spells. But please don't think I'm being mean or anything, I'm just being honest... I really love this story, honest, but I just feel that you've got it wrong in this instance... then again, it could just be me and I could be wrong...
I really liked the music exchange with Mary and Peter though - saw the name Wormtail crop up - is that the origin of his oh-so-infamous nickname there?
James's piece really made me laugh. I loved the idea of Pogo. It was so nice and sweet, especially the piece where he believes that his pet has gone off to look for his family. It was just really innocent, but then that innocence is robbed when he discovers the truth. And the idea about the Swarp's nest was great too! I really liked how you gave Hagrid the last line as well - is this the start of the friendship between them???
Just on an aside - you say you've had a lot of writer's block with this - so I was just wondering, do you have a detailed plan or are you just writing each chapter as it comes? I find always having a very detailed plan of where you're going really helps avoid writer's block - even if it's just a collection of hap-hazard sentences stating what is going to happen. Before you start just sit down and jot down ideas - these events will happen in first-year, these in second-year etc. And say you're building to a big point in third year, you can be dropping little hints in earlier chapters foreshadowing this big point (JK Rowling did that a lot - the casual reference to the vanishing cabinet in OOTP for example, to the fleeting reference to Harry being a Horcrux in Chamber of Secrets: "Voldemort put a piece of himself in me?") - you say in your A/N that you're dropping hints about Peter - keep that up, that's that way to do it, because if you know the point to which the story is building, then you avoid both writer's block and including chapters that don't really serve the overall plot (not that you're doing that or anything, but every now and again writers do fall into that hole a bit). This just works for me anyway, for the novel fic I'm working on at the minute, I've over 50,000 words worth of plot notes and plans, it just helps, so I know exactly where I'm going and what happens in each chapter. I find it really prevents writer's block, but then again, everyone's different, what works for me, might not work for others. I just thought I would give you the tip, just in case you might find it helpful. Because I really love this story, so I would prefer if you didn't have writer's block either ;)
Anyway, keep up the great work! Can't wait for more and more "Playing At War". :)