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Review:Cavell says:
My Godric :o This was... beautiful. There really is no other word for it. At first, I didn't know what you meant, and then Molly went on about how Lucy 'isn't sleeping' and then I got it. And... wow. Present tense works brilliantly for this - I can see her emotions, feel her emotions, and while it would still be a lovely read in past tense, present tense makes it raw, somehow, magnifies her emotions and her thoughts as if it's floating right off the page. Present tense is so hard to write, but you pulled it off perfectly.

I can see next-to-no mistakes, so well done :) Molly was just so heart-wrenching in her grief, and everything she thought was just - gah, I really can't even begin to describe it. Your imagery is beautiful - I can practically see everything right in front of my eyes, the coffin, Lucy's ghost and dead body, even Molly herself and her parents and the other mourners and just... I don't understand why this doesn't have many reviews, because it was an absolutely brilliant read. No complaints at all :)

Anyway, all that aside, thanks a bunch for requesting, feel free to re-request, and good luck with the rest of the story! I can't wait to see how it turns out in the end :) A marvellous story, I'm sure. 10/10


Author's Response: Eeeps! Thank you :S I'm a bit overwhelmed by all your lovely comments i don't know what to say!

I did want it to be ambiguous at the beginning because i wanted it to reflect Molly's mental state and how she wasn't sure what this whole thing was and wanted to believe that it wasn't real. So it does please me that it came across and that eventually you did get it.

I like the present tense too and i'm glad that it makes you feel with the character. The thanks goes to my beta (PenguinsWillReignSupreme) as she suggested that i switch it to present and i'm glad that i did because I think it's made it a better story than what it was.

Gah! I just don't know how to respond to this lovely review i'm all happy and squeeing over it. Grief can be a hard thing to write and i'm just pleased and flattered you felt it so much and saw so much in this chapter. I've been to funerals myself so the only thing i could do was try to draw from those experiences to get the emotions to come out right.

Thanks again for all your comments! I really appreciate them! ;D

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