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Review:inkbutterfly says:
HEY! It's been so long since I last reviewed this, sorry.
I just caught up on everything I missed and I really like how this story is going. The characters are developing nicely and I have really begun to get the feel of them. Rowan is so complex and it is a little hard to get a grasp of how she works, but it makes the whole thing a lot more intriging to read. She is completely different to any character I have read about before and it is really refreshing. I feel like Lily isnt as prominent, and I dont feel as if she has developed as much. Sirius is great, and he is also not the typical Sirius character that most people slide into. James is great as well, and I especially love the way all the characters interact together.
The whole Regulus aspect threw me off. I was completely not expecting that at all. It just added a whole new dynamic to the story and I am really interested as to what is going to happen with that whole thing. I really want to them to be friends, and hopefully she can end up being one of those things which change his mind in the end. To be honest, I am kind of shipping them together. I loved how you wrote that he would be haunted by her for the rest of his life. I still remember that from the chapter it was in. The foreshadowing is great, and I am really interested in what happens next.
The writing is great, and you have good technique, but sometimes I feel as if the whole thing is too straight forward; like you just say what is happening but dont add enough emotion or detail. Another thing you could work on is character voice, because although their personalities are very complex, both of Rowan and Sirius sound and feel the same when you are writing them and focusing on them. You should work on trying to make it show more of their personality so we can connect more with it.
I love this story, so so so much! I'll be reading along and try to review each chapter as well.
Looking forward to an update, and hope you like the killer review ;)
-Kerryn xx

Author's Response: I LOVED the killer review and appreciate you taking the time to leave such a detailed one. I've actually copied and printed it out and stuck it in my writing notebook with your suggestions highlighted to keep them in mind when I'm writing my chapters, so I really appreciate it! xoxoxo

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