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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
It's fantastic that you were able to tie the prompts into pre-existing stories - the very fact that you've written about Susan Bones before is astounding, as things go - but that backstory, only hinted at here, gave added depth to Susan's portrayal. I've always enjoyed stories where I feel like there's more going on beyond the story - it encourages the reader's imagination and more firmly grounds the characters in their world.

What I'm loving about the Hufflepuff entries so far are the complex portrayals of Susan that are emerging, mainly the tension between bravery and fear, loyalty and a desire not to stay out harm's way. It captures Hufflepuff's strange position in Hogwarts as the house that's more difficult to define; its occupants can be all or any of those things - brave, loyal, timid, quiet. I like that your Susan is also a dreamer with a poetic sensibility who takes pleasure in the outside world, no matter what terrible things are going on beneath her feet. She's able to see beyond the horrors of the war even though they've scarred her deeply, and I think that's an admirable, even enviable trait.

Your descriptions are also fantastic. How you used the dragon's names for similes really stood out, and my favourite part was that last amazing paragraph, especially the line They were all single drops that when added together they pulsed with untold meaning. It's a beautiful image to leave the reader with at the end. You did a wonderful job with with the prompts you included and with the story as a whole. I'm surprised that no one else has reviewed this so far - it deserves much more attention!

Author's Response: Ok, i'm going to try to put words to my feelings now and hope that i don't do a bunch of blubbering and senseless keyboard smashing to get them across :D I'm still flailing though inside and overwhelmed by your lovely comments.

I was really excited when we all chose Susan as our champion because i've always loved her and wanted her to have some more face time. She's really interesting, considering how her family was basically picked off by Voldemort and his little minions. There is a lot to explore in her and in the Hufflepuff house involvement in the war in general. I think they were the second house to have the most people involved. Some reason, they never get credit for that.

I was worried that no one would get this Susan though, at least, not without reading the other story. I wanted to give enough background so they'd have an idea of if it but i'm never sure how much is enough. So i'm pleased you got it and felt like it actually added to the story. I think it's important too to have more to the character or story your telling than the reader knows.

I know right? I felt like all the stories were showcasing different Puffy traits and it was great to see because the house typically seems to be portrayed as a house full of duffers. It was lovely to see such support come for it and giving a voice to them.

Thank you again so much for stopping by and leaving this review, it means a lot to me! I think it's so great that you're stopping by many (if not all) task 1 challenges entries and it's great that you're giving them your support. I'm going to stop rambling now because i think this response has gotten longer than the review itself. :P


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