|Review:||Violet Gryfindor says:|
You're amazing, Gubby. A truly amazing writer. I say something like this every time, but it's true - I just love your writing and the way you tell stories. Cho's embittered voice is so well-developed that I can hear it speaking to me - it sounds so adult and frighteningly mature, the voice of the successful person who discovered too late that they missed something along the way, namely happiness. She tells herself that she should be happy, that she has a lot and has come a long way, but it's just not there - she doesn't have it in her. Is it the war? Is it Cedric's death? (I could do a whole reading about why she married a Muggle, but I'm trying to ramble less and review more. :P) Who knows, it doesn't actually matter. But it is brilliant how you got into her head like this.
From what I've read so far, the Ravenclaws have been the most creative when it comes to working in the prompts. Cho herself might as well be the smouldering dragon, bitter and grumpy. I love how you slipped the prompts between the lines, using them as explanations for the Muggle husband. The dragon's blood one was best, though, because the way you had Cho list them off brought out even more bitterness, verging on disgust for the world that, in a way betrayed her, giving her a taste of happiness before ripping it away again.
Okay, I'll stop now before I completely swoon away under the light of your brilliance. It's wonderful to see new stories from you - they're an extra-special treat to read, meant to enjoy slowly like an exquisite cup of specialty coffee to best savour the perfect flavour. That is how I see your stories, yes. ^_^
Author's Response: Oh gawd .___. You know how I feel about getting praise I'm not worthy of! It's funny that you talk about Cho's voice being well-developed because I literally did not even think of writing for this challenge until about 80 minutes before the deadline. I wrote this in a little over an hour. I had no idea what I was doing. So it's really gratifying and humbling and embarrassing to hear any of this. BUT ANYWAY, Cho has the benefit of hindsight, and is bitter about having it. I think it's more about her /thinking/ she doesn't have it in her to be truly happy; I'm sure there's a universe where she could be, but that's not here and now.
(As for a reading about why she married a Muggle, I think it was to distance herself from Cedric, from Harry, from the war and the destruction she herself wrought. To be able to look down on them and reinforce to herself, "This world I escaped is and always has been the pits. How dare they discriminate against me and my husband I HATE YOU ALL YOU HORRID PEOPLE". Cough.)
I read very few of the challenge stories, sadly, with yours the only one from Hufflepuff, one other from Gryffindor, and a few Ravenclaws. I definitely did not think that Cho herself might be the dragon (argh I should have made that connection and worked in that last prompt!). And it's funny that the dragon blood one struck you as the best because I thought it was the least ~subtle one there. (Also yes, the world that 'in a way betrayed her'. Perfect phrasing.)
Ack stop it! My fragile ego can't take it! But honestly, thank you so much for such a lovely review. I don't write nearly as much as I used to, and I like even less of what I do churn out, so it's really great to hear that. Unworthy of it though I am. -hug-