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Review:SilentConfession says:
So i've just read through this in one night and it's such a fabulously created story that i had to finish it from start to finish, it's so ridiculously addicting!

I love the characters you've created and the whole stinken plot! I haven't read a lot of stories that explore this moment in time but i think you've done such a great job at creating this immediacy and fear. Each chapter is so nerve wracking and i'm constantly on my toes to see what is going to happen next! I can't believe you've left such a cliffhanger!

I love Alice i think she's so great here and i love reading about her before she lost her mind. You've really shown her strength and power here and i think that's great. You've also shown how much the war must have hurt the people involved. Like with Alice, if it wasn't for her father, she would have stayed out of this. It's not just that, it's sort of the whole idea behind the plot and how they are desperate to keep this under wraps and not let the public know of the danger that still lingers in the air because it would just create mass chaos. This theme keeps resurfacing and i think you've done and excellent job at that execution as many may just make mention of here or there but i really feel like it permeates the whole story.

One thing i did want to mention though is that there were times i was a little confused with the action that was going on and it wasn't just this chapter but at the end with Moody and her falling and i suppose i'm still trying to see it i suppose in my head and it took a few times to read it over to make sure i was getting what you were saying. Just make sure that when your writing some of these scenes that you're really clear with your wording.

I've really enjoyed reading this (because who doesn't love those good old government conspiracies? which i may be reading a little too much that but oh well :P) Anyway, just wanted to show my appreciation for this. :D

Author's Response: Hello! First off, I am so sorry I didn't respond to your review sooner. I completely meant to, and thought I had. But I suppose that life is just really busy at the moment.

Anyways, let me start off by saying thank you so much! I'm thrilled that you enjoyed this story enough to read through it that quickly :D I definitely do think this era is unexplored, and there aren't too many canon details to constrain things.

I have had a lot of fun writing action and suspense. And I will try to get back into the swing of writing soon--I know I did leave a cliff hanger and then haven't updated in too long.

Alice has probably been the most surprising character for me to write. I originally meant for her and Frank to have a minor role, but I realized that I wanted to give them a bigger part than I had planned. I think Alice's actions show, perhaps more than anyone else, who she is. She cares about her family, but she is willing to be brave and put herself and her happiness in danger to protect others. Elena of course also has some of the same traits as Alice, but she doesn't have a child, and is at a totally different place in her life than Alice.

Thank you for mentioning that. This whole story needs a bit of an edit. While I don't feel like I need to change anything major at this point, I do know that I wrote the first chapters of this over a year and a half ago. Since I feel like my writing has improved since then, I definitely want to make sure that the first chapters are a bit updated. The more recent chapters have been quite a bit longer than the earlier ones as well, and I think as a result, I spent less time editing.

Really, it means a lot to me that you read through this entire story and that you enjoyed it so much. ♥ Again, I feel so bad I didn't respond earlier, but hopefully you can understand!

--Haley


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