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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi, darling!

I saw your status about this new one shot and wanted to check it out!

Ahh.. such an emotional topic. It's so hard for me to think of the way the Marauder's ended up. Either separated by death or betrayal.. aasdf. It makes me turn into a ball of tears.

Anyway, you were very creative with this challenge. Obviously the first thing that I would think of is that they aren't really brothers, but you fixed that perfectly and you made it so different by going about it the way you did. They have always been brothers, but the passing of blood is what sealed the deal in a sense.

I think your characterizations are perfect. The only thing I want to point out is that Sirius seems a bit disgusted when James starts talking about the muggle way of blood brothers, just the way you have him saying it makes it seem like he's more or less thinking, why would we do anything muggles do? It may have just come across to me that way. But we know that he loved muggle things even if it was just to spite his family.

But, he is the one the suggests the pact and I LOVE that. I love the string of memories you take him through, then when you bring us back to the house where two of his best friends have fallen, it just ties all those emotions together in such a sad way.

You do an amazing job with imagery! The second paragraph repeats 'eyes' a lot, maybe you can find a way to reword something so a few can be cut out. It doesn't take anything away from your story! I just thought it was worth pointing out!

You ended this perfectly, then of course I got sad all over again because I know what happens to Sirius next. You've made me an emotional blog!

Great one shot, I'm happy I had a chance to stop by and read it!

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