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Review:sophie_hatter says:
Hello! Here for the BvB review battle:-)

Well, this was an excellent start for me - I love Draco/Astoria! For me, your opening passage was gorgeous. There were some really lovely thoughts expressed, and you painted a very vivid mental image.

I really liked the relationship you constructed between Draco and Astoria - the open, teasingand honest nature of it rang true for me.

Being constructive, some of your sentences meandered a little, and would have benefitted from being broken up. You may not be aware of this, but you also have a slight tendency to switch between the past and present tense.

That said, I loved how you used three very different scenes to show the path that Draco took to get back to social acceptance, and the full circle you showed us - very commendable, and very enjoyable.

Author's Response: Hey there! Thanks for this lovely review!

I honestly can't help but smile a little every time someone tells me that they like Draco/Astoria. They really are awesome!

I was a little worried about the opening passage actually, that it may seem a little detached from the rest of the chapter. Nonetheless, I'm very happy to hear that you liked it! And I'm also glad you thought I kept the relationship between Draco and Astoria rather believable.

Also, thank you for the CC. I really do need to get back to this story and edit it or have it beta'd because Nano can do wonders. I'll try to keep an eye out for those two things you've pointed out.

Again, thanks for the review! I really do appreciate it!

-Manno


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