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Review:Phoenix_Flames says:
Hello there! I'm here with your review as requested! I am so dreadfully sorry it took me ages to get around to this. With work and the House Cup going on, my review thread sort of got overlooked the past few weeks! So I'm really sorry about that, but I'm here now!

I think you're off to an awesome start! There's a great connection between all the cousins here in this chapter. I love it when you can feel that family bond just in the dialogue, and that definitely shines through here.

I've also read lots of next gen teen pregnancy stories, but never one that focuses on Roxanne! I love this change, and I can't wait to see how you do it!

I didn't pass too many mistakes. So that's awesome! Nothing that really stuck out to me.

I love how you didn't take forever to introduce characters. I hate that, and in a story that is going to have multiple chapters, I believe that you have to enthrall the reader right from the very beginning. There's no time for boring introductions, that came come later, and you did exactly that here in this! You captured me, pulled me in, and I would definitely be back for the next chapter.

And I love how you put in bits and pieces of Roxanne's personality as the chapter went. Like her smart comments in her head and everything. It really gives me an insight of her character without taking the time to explain it. Awesome!

I think you're off to a great start! Thanks for requesting! Feel free to come by again when the next chapter is up! Thanks again, and I hope I was somewhat helpful! :)

Author's Response: Thank you for this lovely review :)

I wanted to create a strong connection between all the cousin as I wanted a strong bond within the story as it'll be a taught time for them, especially with all lying to their parents and family so Roxanne would feel safe.

I don't tend to write pregnancy story but I came across this challenge and I just couldn't pass up this opportunity plus I wanted to write about a minor next generation character. That has always fascinate me.

I'm glad you liked that little bits and pieces of Roxanne's personality. I want to do it subtly and not too overwhelming.

Thank you for reviewing and I shall be sure to re-request when the next chapter is up.


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