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Review:SilentConfession says:
Hello there! It's been ages since i've read this story and it's good to see the next installment of Brienne's life!

Character development was so strong in this chapter, maybe the strongest yet. But then i'm a little fuzzy on some of the details of the past chapters. However, i really felt the friendships here and how their group dynamics were like. That was especially strong as i can see very clearly why these guys are mates. Most people just throw in a bunch of characters and expect them to work as friends but what i really loved from this chapter was that these guys were thrown together and their personalities work together so well. I hope that makes sense. Their conversations for instance were real and Hogwarts seems like a school in this story rather than just a cool place for people to fall in love.

Another part i really liked was that there was a lot of tie-in's to canon so it made me feel like this was actually happening during the right era and made me think of what else was going on around the campus. It was a nice touch and it was very subtle so it didn't take over your own plot but i think it enhanced it for sure.

Although there wasn't a lot happening plot wise i think this was an excellent and needed chapter to show where Brienne is emotionally and i feel a lot closer to your characters here as well. I think you did a good job balancing her sadness and her trying to cope by focusing on her friends and work. It didn't feel like the chapter was being overtaken by either emotion.

The groups reaction to Brienne at the end was great, i thought it was great that they haven't pushed her yet but i can see that they might later on if she continues to close herself off to them. It does make me wonder if she'll let them know or if she'll just harbor it inside herself.

I'm curious to know if that Lee fancying Brienne is going to play any role in this or if it was just some off hand comment that isn't true? Oh the intrigue!

I only have one small thing to mention with this chapter and that is sometimes i just didn't know who was speaking. It wasn't often but there were a few times when all of them were together.

Other than that i can't think of what other critique i can give you here. There is some great character development and really solid description and narrative, great job! Thanks for requesting me, your story is always lovely to read.

Author's Response: :) Hi! I always look forward to your reviews! I really appreciate your comments, I love that my characters are relatable and appear 'real' to my readers. I also really want it to appear seamless with the canon narrative so hopefully I'm doing that aswell :D

I'll try to make it a bit clearer on who's speaking, thank you for picking up on that, and thank you very much for your review :)


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