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Review:Debra20 says:
Back again!

Glad to see that this too was a delicious read. Another extremely well handled chapter of this little short story you have started. There is something that attracts me to your story and telling it from different point of views adds to it's appeal.

Moody. Strong. Capable. Calm. Human. This chapter does the character of Alastor Moody so much justice. You have shown us what I've always suspected: that he's not a war machine. He is indeed human with live emotions, a conscience and a working heart. War does harden him and it would be foolish not to toughen yourself when there is so much depending on you, on your capability to act fast, to make quick decisions that could very well kill a loved one. Moody is not an exception. War changes people. And this is exactly what you managed to convey with this second chapter. Very well handled!

Fabian and Gideon. I have a soft spot for these two and I can't explain why. We see and hear too little about them in the books, not to mention the films, to actually 'fall in love' with the characters. There's something about their names. So my delight was doubled when reading this chapter because apart from a great characterization of Moody we get to see how these two brothers were. Even though their 'screen time' so to say is limited you can feel that they are brave, that they won't back off from danger or risk when it comes to protecting their loved ones. That's exactly how I imagined them. Of course there is more to a character than that, but the first image you transmitted felt very real and true. Nicely done!

This is proving to be a wonderful piece! It definitely deserves more love and attention :D

Author's Response: Glad to see you back!

I really wanted to approach this story from different points of view, though for the Marauders parts, I stuck with one POV to hopefully make a bigger impact.

I was definitely worried about my interpretation of Moody so I'm pleased at how human he comes across to most of the readers. I really wanted to show how much experience he had and how much he was relied on in the war.

Gah, I love Gideon and Fabian and would love to write more of them in the future, for sure. I definitely took from Molly a little bit how strong she is as a character and used that to create how I imagined Gideon and Fabian would be.

Thank you so much for your lovely review. I really appreciate it.

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