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Review:maskedmuggle says:
Hey Annon!

This is fantastic! It really is a well written piece in such a short timeframe. I loved your writing here - there were some absolutely brilliant sentences. I loved all the feelings, thoughts and emotions that were conveyed, they were interesting and really felt like true reflections of Cho.

There was just once sentence I thought you could rewrite, it just sounded too messy and long to me: All because Harry had just happened to get put up against the most vicious dragon… alive) I'm also skeptical that Cho would know about Moody's tip for Harry. And the only other thing was I couldn't help wondering why Cho wasn't watching the greatest epic fight of all time between Voldemort and Harry? It's very hard to imagine that she wouldn't have seen that.

I did enjoy this though! A nice incorporation of the prompts as well :)
- Charlotte

Author's Response: Hey Charlotte!

Thanks for reviewing :). I wrote this really speedily, so I'm definitely planning on going back and editing (the sentence you pointed out in particular). Most of the emotion just poured out without filtering through my head to be honest, and I know that it's quite a mishmash of conflicting emotions. I'm glad it didn't confuse you to much!!

Well, I suppose you could argue that everyone would have seen that last Voldemort-Harry fight, but we don't /know/ that for sure. And if she'd been elsewhere in the castle/grounds, it could've taken her a while to reach the Great Hall again.

Anyway, thanks for the lovely review! :D
-Annon x

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