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Review:manno_malfoy says:
Hi! I'm here with the review you've requested!

I'm still having a hard time understanding how you guys have managed to come up with such wonderful stories in such a short time! Truly amazing! And the Ravenclaw entries I've read so far are all so awesome! I may be slightly biased though...!

Anyway! Firstly, I find it crucial to congratulate on how you've seamlessly executed the prompts! My personal favourite bits are: the one that has to do with the dragon blood -you've used it brilliantly, and the one that has to do with the Probity Probes and Secrecy Sensor! The fact that you've made a security check up before the race is quite a smart move and adds to how realistic everything seems to be.

Also, the very idea of taking this opportunity to include the broom race in a fanfic was smart! I mean, I am yet to come across an entry that has used this event too.

I found it great that you've mentioned to us why Cho was doing something as this in the first place and that you've written that bit well. I suppose that we did need to know why anyone like Cho -this may be natural for a hardcore Gryffindor or a Sirius Black- would submit themselves to something as insanely dangerous as that race!

I liked the pace at which the story went and I felt that you neither bombarded us with descriptions of everything around Cho nor left us feeling that the story lacked detail. In fact, I believe that you've done a good job describing the race and moving the characters around in the sky in a way that made me see it in my mind.

As for the ending which you've pointed out in the request... Honestly, yes, I do believe that maybe it's a bit cliche-ish to make the main character win the race. Nonetheless, I believe that it's a very suitable ending and necessary for the inclusion of the 'flourishing in the face of adversity' prompt. Besides having portrayed Cho throughout the story as someone who's been very well-prepared for the race and had more than one reasonable motive to invest her best effort, you've worded that bit very well and linked it to the title -which I liked.

Well done on getting this awesome entry in for task one and, hopefully, W.W.W.W.W.

-Manno

Author's Response: Hi Manno!

Thank you so much for the lovely review! Well, there are some absolutely wonderful writers in Ravenclaw, (and in other houses too)! :) Thank you! I spent a while trying to think of a good idea to go with the prompts and I'm so happy I found the broom race because it allowed me to put in all the prompts fairly easily!

I'm glad you found it great that I mentioned why Cho was doing this. Initially it wasn't as detailed as I had it now but I wanted it to be believable. Aw thank you! One of the things I was most worried about was description and telling the story - I think it's something I sometimes struggle with so it's really nice to hear that the race made sense (and this is so out of my comfort zone as well).

I definitely agree with your point - but also, happy endings are always preferable aren't they? :P Thank you! It's great to hear that you liked the title linking with the last words - I always try to do something like that. Lately I've been debating whether to change the title to something more dramatic and action-y though.. maybe not?

Anyway, thank you so much for reading and reviewing this! I really do appreciate the really lovely review you left me! :)
- Charlotte


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