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Review:NaidatheRavenclaw says:
Hi there! This was definitely a really unusual take on the prompts given, but I thoroughly enjoyed reading it :)

I like the backstory you gave this lawyer in the first couple paragraphs. It made him deeper, more relateable, especially as characterization is often thrown out of the window in one shots. I do wish you had brought that back somehow, as it seemed a bit of a waste to give him such a lovely backstory and then focus on Neville. I guess it was the prompt, though, to write about Neville, so that isn't a very big deal :P

And really, I loved Neville's stories as well. I sort of cringed at that ending, because I adore Neville and this is such a sad end for him, but you wrote it so well. The transition from seemingly normal to manic was really smooth and believable, so good job with that as well. It creeped me out a bit, to be honest, but that should be a compliment. You wrote it wonderfully!

Great use of the prompts and a lovely one shot :)

-Naida

Author's Response: Hi, and yes! I wish I'd been able to concentrate on Lloyd a little more too but it just wasn't meant to be. And thank you, it was actually quite hard to depict Neville, who turned into such a strong character, crushed and similar to his parents. Creepy was what I was going for, so excellent!

Thank you for your review! :)


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