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Review:Erised says:
Hey Debra! I'm very proud of a) this wonderful entry for the house Cup and b) that I'm the very first person to review your very first story! Yays all round! Haha.

Well, this story is great. I think you've shown a really interesting angle from mainly Neville's point of view that really highlights the theme of flourishing in the face of adversity, as well as developing your characters excellently. I love the scene between Ginny and Neville and the beginning - it just feels really real and sets their characters up really nicely.

I thought you fitted the prompts in really well, like seriously well! They blended in really nicely, especially the Dark Detectors one. Snape was extremely creepy as usual, and it's amazing that they only got detention isn't it? I suppose it's fitting in with the whole 'double agent' thing he had going on.

Luna in this was hilarious and kooky as usual, and the plot flowed very well too. Your writing style is excellent. This is a piece to be proud of! Go Gryffies!

Author's Response: Hey Jenny. It's a pleasure to have you here. Thanks so much for proofreading and helping me me improve it :)

I thought about writing this story from Neville's point of view because I knew that the 'trio' would meet Snape and who fears Snape more than Neville? I considered it would be most interesting to put the spot light on him and see how he handles the situation.

I'm happy that you liked how I wrote the characters. I am in the process of re-reading the books but as I remember her, Ginny has always struck me as being quite impulsive so it only came natural for her to go bursting into Snape's office with a half planned plan. So naturally Neville would try and talk some sense into her. Not that that did any good anyway.

Thanks so so much for this lovely review!


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