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Review:WitnesstoitAll says:
Hey!!

Spreading some lovely Ravenclaw cheer and support!! I though that this was an interesting one shot -- what with Cho's hatred of Harry and all. And I liked the way the italic sections complimented the normal narrative... like a thought that's a bit too special to be with the rest of her story. They were artfully done, too, for the most part (the one about the portrait felt as though it disrupted the flow a bit, but not too terribly). At the end, I was surprised to see an extra scene tagged onto what one its own would have been a very powerful ending, and I'm not sure I'd have continued on. There is somehting very powerful about this line and the images it creates:

That was the moment it was all over for Cho Chang.

Anyway, I think this was a good one shot that worked the prompts in really well. W.W.W.W.W!!!

Author's Response: Hi Mel!! Aw, bless you :).
Mmm, the italics weren't priginally going to be in italics, but I seem to have this weird obsession with italics and zero dialogue when I do one-shots. Ah, you're right about the portrait one- I can see that now. Thanks for pointing it out!

I might see if I can find a way to work a few of the lines from the extra scene on somewhere else then, because I liked a few of the metaphors, haha. But you're right, again :D.

Thanks for a lovely review! :3

W.W.W.W.W indeed ;D


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