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Review:CambAngst says:
Hello, darling! I'm making my way through the Task 1 submissions for our illustrious house, trying to help out where I can. Of course, you've already gotten most of my feedback, so I'm mostly just here to gush and fangirl squee. I really owe blueirony for introducing me to that term.

I really liked the sort of rudimentary sentience that you wrote into the dragon's point of view. Not fully human, but keenly attuned to her surroundings and well aware of the dangers confronting her and her baby. It was a nice way to imagine such a beautiful, noble creature. Not some dumb beast like the poor dragon imprisoned in the bowels of Gringott's.

You know what I really, really loved about this? You didn't bother trying to work in the prompt with the details of Neville's wand. I've read half a dozen of these, and people have struggled so much trying to make that sound natural. It's really, really hard to engineer the circumstances where such technical details sound even remotely natural. It usually just sounds gratuitous. Bravo for not being such an obsessive completist!

It was heart-warming to see Neville discover his affection for the baby dragon at the end. The mother can die on a contented note, knowing that she delivered her baby to safety.

I think you nailed every one of the prompts you chose to include. Nothing sounded out of place. Everything flowed nicely and the story was really engaging. It didn't feel like it was written just for a challenge.

Alright, I'm done squee-ing now. You know I loved it.

Gryffindor! ROAR!!!

Author's Response: That stupid wand. I tried. I tried to get that in, I tried to get all the dragon breeds in.. It just wasn't happening. The wand's only chance was at the mentions of dragon poaching and how useful their heart strings are, and for Charlie to say, "oh, Neville, isn't your core heartstring?" then have Neville correct him and give what it is. Didn't fit. Two Dragons are dying. Would Charlie care what Neville's wand is? No.

Then with the breeds, it just wasn't natural. It came down to the fact that I was two words away from the mark, and I really couldn't take anything out without feeling like I was compromising the story line. And when it comes down it it; this is a story. I would have loved to be one of the people that said, I used all my prompts!

But it wasn't worth ruining my lil Dragon one shot over. Anyway, thank you again my dear for betaing/opinion/everything wonderful you do.

I really do imagine these Dragons as just that: beautiful, noble, special. Think how ancient they are, if they hadn't evolved enough in this world to understand most things, they wouldn't be around still. Stupid poachers. I'm going to mention to PETA to start adding Dragons to their protected list. ;)!

Thank you so much for your review! And for not chasing my with Izzy's pitchfork because my impatient nature ;)!!


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