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Review:Unwritten Curse says:
What an opening chapter! I don't know where to begin or how to structure this review, so please excuse the rambling to follow.

First, I love Ruby. Adore her. You could've so easily made her the all-knowing, vague nobody of a guide, but you made her a standout character, with quirks and emotions and everything good. Her role hasn't consumed her; she's still an individual. And though Sirius is annoyed with her, I'm the exact opposite.

I love the atmosphere. Your imagery is great, but it's beyond that. It's in Sirius's emotions, how he's torn between slightly-disturbed curiosity and a feeling that everything will be fine. Add in Ruby mentioning that his curiosity should have subsided and you've got quite the air of mystery. We know Ruby's informed but not too informed, and that Sirius is "breaking rules." Perfect perfect perfect, not forced at all.

My especial favorite part of the chapter was when Ruby told him to turn around and he finally noticed the welcome sign. Such brilliantly subtle humor. You're quite the crafty author.

All in all, beautiful. The prose is gorgeous, but a story is so much more than pretty words, and you've made sure to keep us entertained with authentic, unique characters and just the right amount of mystery. Really, I'm in awe. Just lovely.

On to chapter two!

- Gina

Author's Response: In all honesty, she SHOULD be a disinterested, uninvested guide. It is, essentially, what she's supposed to do. She's got this task, and she's taking care of it - but she's on that borderline between doing what she has to do and doing what she has to do, but getting too involved as she's doing it. She's just as stubborn and curious Sirius is, though he doesn't know that quite yet.

But I'm getting ahead of myself.

Thank you so much for the review and the kind words, I really do appreciate them tremendously!

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