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Review:RHadley says:
Wow (again).

Just from reading each of these, I get the impression that you have a very clear, detailed understanding of each of the characters involved, and their reactions and personalities. I'm glad that none of these feel like a cliche, as that would kill of the story - the wonder comes from each of the people reacting in a different way to the offer, although all do accept their position.

This story would've been terrible wthout good characterization, mercifully, it has some brilliant characterization. I don't want to have to choose between the characters for my favourite, becasue I found them all very engaging. However, I feel that the way you presented McGonagall deserves a special mention - when I posted the review of chapter one I mentioned her motherly nature - but after reading the interactions between her and the five students, her motherly emotions are very clear.
My favourite such example is when she is speaking to Lily, with the 'Say hello to Mr. Potter' line and her emotions surrounding that.

One of my favourite things about these small moments is how you return them back to the way, with McGonagall feeling like she is signing their death scentences, is something truly powerful.

-RH

Author's Response: Wow, what a compliment, thank you! The Marauders + Lily are definitely characters that I feel very familiar writing so I think that helped, despite the fact that it was told from McGonagall's POV, in seeing their reactions to the proposition.

Ahah, I'm glad my characterizations worked for you. It seems it would be a tragedy if they didn't. Yes, I do see McGonagall as a motherly figure for them and I really wanted to bring that home in these chapters, write her feelings of guilt at dragging them into this war. I did want to reiterate her thoughts on that too, hence the repetition of signing their death sentences.

Thank you for your lovely reviews. They were a pleasant surprise this morning. :)


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