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Review:angel_speaks says:
Hiya!
Em here with your full-on review as promised! (FINALLY!)

Wow!!! So so good! I had a feeling that something like this was going to happen. Draco coming on to Kaya like that for no good reason would've made the story line too...plain? Anyways, moving on!

Grammar/ spelling: There were a few missing words here and there throughout the chapters. I wouldn't say that it disrupts the plot line and presentation of the story too much, but it does pop out a lot.

Characterization: I'm liking Kaya a lot as a character. So far, I'd say that she's developing alright throughout the story. I find it adorable how she continuously fights off her emotions for Draco and despite the revelation of Draco's true intentions with her, I still think that she will give in. As for the Draco character in your story, I could definitely imagine the canon pulling something off like this (haha) I'm not one to stick to canons as I love reading how different authors get creative with the original characters and I think this is one of the most creative Dracos that I've ever read ^_^

Plot/ Flow: As far as plot holes are concerned, it was just that one bit in the earlier chapters that I mentioned in the review that I left (I think it was either the 2nd or 3rd chapter). Other than that I think that you are doing really well with this story! Furthermore, it's flowing really well. It's not just jumping from one section to the next. Good Job!

Overall, this is quite a good read! I'm definitely hooked and am looking forward to seeing it through the end!

Happy Writing! 9/10

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