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Review:EverDiggory says:
Finally, finally here with your review! I think this is honestly the longest anyone has ever had to wait. I'm so sorry!

Plot: This is really interesting and I was so thrilled to see such a unique story with characters written so often! You gave it such a unique and capturing twist!

Imagery: There was some, but I feel like perhaps there could be more? I suspect there will be more in later chapters, but I feel like its imagery what brings the story to life and I stress this with even the best writers(:

Characterization: I loved Orion, and Cygnus. I also feel like you gave us a good yet brief glimpse of Cissy. I think Sirius was written quite well too, but I would have liked to see more of Regulus!

Grammar/Spelling: Perfect! I didn't see any errors! This is always great because it didn't distract me from the story!

Flow: This was surprisingly good! I really expected it to be jumpy and whatnot with the whole Acts but you wrote it in such a way that you pulled it off perfectly! Congratulations, I consider that a feat! Whether you do or not, I don't know, but I find it rather impressive!

Reader interest: Terribly, terribly interested hun! This whole Cygnus is bad yet seems good is just intriguing, Sirius and his slightly rebellious attitude is a joy to read, and I love Cissy and how she's all 'holier than thou'! I particularly liked the relationship between Sirus and his father. I think you captured the father/son relationship perfectly, which was just wonderful!

Ultimately, I think this is really great! The only CC I would recommend considering is adding a bit more imagery. I don't know if this will be hard because its in acts and if that even affects it, I don't know. But I think some quality imagery would really make this story go from great to fabulous! I was impressed by such a unique idea and look froward to see where you're taking this!



Author's Response: It hasn't even been that long so don't stress about it. I've waited much longer for reviews and I honestly don't care. :)

I really wanted to write something that I had never seen before and this plot bunny kind of smacked me in the face and then wouldn't leave me alone until I wrote it. The Black family seemed perfect for the roles and then the other canon characters sort of fell into place after that. It was fate. ;)

Hm, there may or may not be more imagery, I'm not sure. I feel like I'm pretty heavy on the description and this, stylistically, is a pretty straight-forward fic so maybe that's why I didn't write as much imagery as there would be in another one of my fics. I'm not sure if I'll ever go back and edit more into the fic but it will be something I'll keep in mind, especially for future chapters.

I'm sad I killed Orion off so quickly, he would've been fun to write. But I do enjoy writing Cyngus, such a sneaky devil. You will definitely see more Cissy, especially in chapter 6, and in future chapters. Regulus didn't have a huge role in this particular chapter but he is included in the remaining chapters a lot, don't worry!

My fabulous betas really do the best job and I'm very thankful to them. I'll be sure to pass your compliments on to them.

I'm really pleased that the scene changes and POV shifts worked for you. I'm trying really hard to make the transitions flow well so that's definitely something I'd love for you to comment on in future chapters.

I'm trying to figure out why the only readers I'm getting are ones I'm requesting, so it's important to make sure that the story is interesting enough. I'm glad you're enjoying it so far. The characters will only grow from here and I hope that you'll continue to love this fic as much as I love writing it.

I will take your comments on imagery into consideration and I will look into editing it into the chapters, but if not, like I said, it will be something I keep in mind for future chapters.

Thanks for your super helpful review. I'll be sure to re-request as soon as you have spots open.

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