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Review:Aether says:
I'm really enjoying this story! :) I can see that Hermione and Ron are really in love and supportive of each other. Their bickering in the beginning was also really great because it was a nice way to show dimension to their relationship.

This might seem nitpicky and weird, but it's a general rule of thumb: when writing numbers in stories, writers generally spell out numbers that are below 100 (eg, nineteen, twenty-one, thirty-three, 101, 10,000). Now that I've told you this, you might notice it more when you're reading other books/stories. I don't think it really matters that much, but I feel that it looks a little informal and awkward when numbers aren't spelled out, even if people don't know about that rule.

Anyway, great chapter. It was nice to meet Hermione's parents! I had more questions about them that could have been answered with more details, again. Don't fear adding more description/dialogue. It will only give more depth to your characters and plot line, which will pull readers in more. Betas are really helpful with that sort of thing, because they can prompt more dialogue/description with questions.

I think it's completely realistic that Hermione and Ron are still worried about Death Eaters, and I love the new element it adds to your story. :)

This one sentence caught my attention: At 11:50 am two figures appeared in an alley way next too Hunters lane. "Alley way" should be alleyway and "too" should be "to." Capitalization problems, especially after quotes, are in this chapter, which are easily fixed with a few read-throughs. :)

Nice chapter! Reading on!

Aether

Author's Response: I'm glad you're still enjoying the story :D
I hadn't heard about that rule before, I'll keep it in mind from now on, thanks for letting me know!
I'll see what I can do with Hermione's parents, see if I can answer some of your questions :)
I'll go back and fix the grammar/capatilisation errors!
Thanks again :D


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