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Review:Aether says:
Awww, they're so in love! :) I love how adorable Ron and Hermione are. Ron is so supportive, and I think that's really great! I was very surprised when Molly scolded Hermione for being pregnant, especially since she was probably pretty young when she started having babies (since she's had so many, fairly spread apart in age). However, I was really relieved to hear her apologize. I can imagine that she was just being really hot-headed.

More, more, more is my only complaint! I feel like this chapter could be three times as long as it is. Dialogue is a really great way to give the reader a better understanding of the characters' personalities, how they interact with each other, and it prevents the build-up of description, like in the paragraph that begins with "They were the last to arrive at the burrow..." You tell us outright about the various characters, but I feel like dialogue could have broken up that paragraph and revealed more about the characters.

Really great job on this chapter, though. Grammar looks really good in this chapter, though small things catch my eye, like "burrow" should be capitalized, I believe. Description takes a lot of extra effort/time/work and you also have to understand your characters a lot better to add it, but it definitely adds a lot to a story. :)

Whenever I'm editing, it's always the first thing I look to add: where can I explain things better with more dialogue/description?

Excellent second chapter!


Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying it, I love writing about Ron and Hermione :)
I'll see what I can do to add more description/dialogue to make the chapter better!
I'll also go back and fix the grammar/capitalisation errors :)
Thanks again for reviewing :D

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