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Review:dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap says:
it took every ounce of long-practised self-restraint not to go back down to the Hog's Head and force poison down Lucius' throat.

^ Oh Severus. His actions are exactly what I had expected before the last chapter. I knew he was going to do something and I don't know why I'm so surprised he had followed her so quickly.

I couldn't resist the temptation of being able to look at her whenever I wanted. Fortunately Lockhart had been photographed separately, so I had been able to take the gruesome pleasure of slicing free his picture and burning it slowly.

^ Severus knows just how to amuse me. Poor Lockhart. I wonder if he has any friends. Anyway, this softer side of Severus is nice to read. I wonder how he gets work done when he's always thinking about her, staring at her or dreaming about her.

I don't know what to say... I'm quite embarrassed, actually. I panicked. I've made this potion so many times, and I've never made that mistake before.

^ My favorite part of the chapter. Not only did they work together and complete the potion but Severus actually didn't know how to do something and didn't know what she was using to save his potion. Sometimes I forget that Severus really doesn't know all, even though he acts like he does. The fact that he admitted he was embarrassed was a nice touch. I feel like at that moment he finally let himself show, someone no one else sees because if it was anyone else I don't think he would have said it. Of course if it was anyone else he probably would not have let them help him.

Author's Response: Hi Deeds! Thanks for stopping back in. I'm guessing you're totally swamped with July NaNo right now. Didn't you just finish the June one? Are you a total writing masochist?! Haha, I'm actually in awe. I'd love to finish one of those some day, but I don't think it would be the best thing for my sanity right now. Getting out a new chapter every 2 weeks is a good enough goal for me at the moment.

Well of course he followed her right away! What exactly he was planning on doing... that's another matter entirely. Probably climb a drain pipe and peek in the window or something. Severus doesn't trust Lucius more than he can throw him (and we all know Severus is much too busy being hot and brainy to work out).

I'm sure Lockhart had some friends. Probably the sort of "I'm rich and famous and so are you, so we can associate with each other while still gossiping behind the other's back" type of friends. I originally had Severus burn out Lockhart's eyes in the picture, but decided that was a bit too creepy, however much Lockhart might deserve it.

I'm glad you liked that part at the end. It was very important to me for Severus to have someone to compliment him. He definitely doesn't know everything, and sometimes he really does do very hurtful and callous things, especially to Harry and Neville. I like to think that Avrille at least made him aware of where he needs improvement, even if maybe he doesn't actually do the right thing all the time still (there's only so much he can take of Neville melting every single cauldron he touches, for example. Poor Neville.)

Thanks so much for the review! Good luck with your writing this month! ~Renny


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