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Review:WitnesstoitAll says:
Baww. Bill and Fleur are such a great canon couple! This was a very interesting portrayal of their relationship -- I was a bit taken aback by their charcterization in the opening scene (mostly Bill's); I was shocked by his certainty that she wouldn't be able to handle it. But I suppose in the heat of an argument, you sometimes say things you don't necessarily mean -- sometimes your worry for the person you love overrides reason. Gah. Bill's such a babe.

As the one shot unfolded, however, I think that you did a good job building their relationship and their love. Fleur is such a strong character! It was lovely reading about her. I particularly enjoyed the little scene between Molly and Fleur. They are both such strong headed women who both love Bill, and so naturally they are often at odds with one another, but I thought that little moment between them was incredibly sweet and touching.

You did a good job with this! I suppose the only thing I'd suggest to possibly improve it (or writings of this style in general) would be to try to soften your transitions some -- It was easy enough to follow here with the page breaks in the text, but they were very stark.

All in all, this was a very enjoyable one shot!
xoxo

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review, I had a lot of fun writing Fleur. I really find her captivating, so much contradictions wrapped up into one woman. Gahhh I need to go through and edit this entire story so badly. It was written in my 'just getting back into writing' phase and really needs to be improved. I'm so happy that you liked it though and I'm glad that the Molly and Fleur scene was touching. It was hard to get both of them to lower their barriers just a bit, so I wanted to make sure it sounded natural.

Thank you again for your lovely reviews, my dear!

Jami


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