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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
So I like how you start off the chapter with Percy in the past, revealing to us their first meeting, and then we move on to Audrey's POV and the present time.

First, in the past, Percy is kind of a bit of a snot, isn't he? His snide comments about his hurt co-worker and then laughing to himself while surely making himself look like a creep to the Healer. I really loved how he asked Audrey out and then when she asked to clarify, he pretended he didn't say anything and wanted to walk off. That's kind of adorable at how embarrassed he was.

Then to the present. I'm still trying to get used to Audrey's character. She's definitely quirky but her rambling monologue is getting old rather fast. I think I was mostly frustrated when Ginny opened the door and she noted the resemblance, but then assumed he had moved on and had a girlfriend. If she's going to notice the familial resemblance, then why would 'girlfriend' be her second thought? I'm just curious. It kind of frustrated me at how dim she was being, or maybe just trying to get out of a sticky situation.

Ginny and George were amusing. I loved how they asked if she was related because of the air. Though they certainly said things that were meant to hurt, I think. Like mentioning all of Percy's old girlfriends but never having heard of her. That's kind of a big 'ouch.' I know how curious they all are about each other's lives, but I was annoyed with Ginny when she said she wanted to listen in on this "private" matter. I just can't imagine her saying something like that and if someone wanted to talk to my brother privately, I wouldn't just outright say that I wanted to stay even if I desperately wanted to know what was going on. So I suppose I just found that a bit unrealistic.

I did like how Audrey kept stalling about telling Percy. You can obviously tell that she's struggling with the idea that she's pregnant with Percy's child. Percy's reaction is definitely one I did not anticipate but it makes me happy that he seems happy about it. I got a hint of his feelings for Audrey from his monologue (not the letter he wrote in the prologue, that I suppose that did say a lot about him in a roundabout way) but they hadn't been dating very long so like I said, I was a bit surprised by his reaction (but not unhappy about it!)

Now that she's revealed to him she's pregnant, I'm interested to see how they're going to deal with the matter now that they're broken up. If Percy will want to get back together or if Audrey will be stubborn and want to be a single mom, etc.

Author's Response: Honestly, you're probably the first person to call Percy a snot and Audrey quirky. Those aren't normally used.

And Ginny is based on my sister, if I ever wanted to be alone with someone (especially of the opposite gender), there is no way she wouldn't eavesdrop, she'd probably try to get it out of me then and there.

But that could be just my sister.

Thanks for the review!

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