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Review:Aphoride says:
Ooh, I really like this! I've always loved the idea of stories about what happened at Hogwarts while the trio were off hunting Horcruxes and all that jazz - it's such an open period, you know? So many things you can do with it!

Your Ginny is incredible. I liked how you slipped in her nickname for Fleur (although personally I'd imagine her to be a little warmer to Fleur after what happened at the end of the sixth book, you know, but it's not that big a deal) and had her parents and Bill and Fleur with her at the beginning. She seemed pretty close to the Ginny from canon as well - fiesty but relatively sensible, still angry about the changes and 'in the know' about certain things and, of course, very loyal to her friends.

Luna and Neville were great too - I felt I could already see Neville had grown up a little over the summer, which makes perfect sense and continues on from the Death Eaters' escape in OotP, you know - it's a logical step. I loved how Luna, of all of them, was still hoping that the year would be similar, still thought that there would be some similarities - it's a very Luna-esque trait and really rounded out her character I think.

There were a couple of things which I thought were off... firstly, I'm not really sure if Ginny would be able to recognise a Death Eater solely by what robes he's wearing. Maybe she's seen a wanted poster or remembers him from the tower in book 6? Amycus Carrow was, I think, there at the time so it's possible. Secondly, when you mentioned that a load of the teachers were glaring at Snape it felt a little off to me. I definitely don't think they'd be happy with it or that they'd just lie down and let Snape do whatever he wanted, but I'm not sure they'd glare. I think that might be a bit too obvious, you know? A bit too open.

It's really well written, though. It flows very well and both your characters and your plot are very, very solid. I'm really interested to see where you take this and how you make the characters grow - because they will. Also, Ginny's point of view seems so natural - it's lovely.

Keep going and I'm sure I'll find you again soon in the review battle! :D
Aph xx

Author's Response: Hi! I'm glad you liked the idea for this story. :) You're right, I'm having so much fun with this plot, considering we know almost nothing about what happened at Hogwarts during the seventh book.

In my mind, I've always pictured Ginny becoming closer to Fleur after a different event which occurs in this story. She's just sort of upset with Fleur because to Ginny, Fleur is taking away her older brother Bill. Ginny does become closer to Fleur, but not yet.

Yay, I did a good job with Luna and Neville's characterization! :D

Yeah, I guess it doesn't make sense that Ginny would recognize a Death Eater by their robes. Thanks for the suggestions. :)

I'm glad you thought it was well-written and that Ginny's PoV was realistic. Thank you so much for the lovely review!


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