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Review:RHadley says:
Wow.

I've never read a story that presents someone with a mental illness quite like that, and to say I'm impressed is quite the understatement.

The way you've written this means that everything is very simple, easy to understand and yet all so subtle, it's the show don't tell rule at its finest, and it makes this story brilliant.

Reading the small final paragraphs - where she is finally mentioned, this second nature or consciousness is genuinely intimidating, if not actually scary, and that is very hard to do properly, so well done.

Loved it,
-RH

Author's Response: Thanks! :D It's not entirely a mental illness, actually, but it really does seem that way - and everything will be explained later on!

Gosh, thank you so so much! I'm so glad you like it! I tend to shove description in everywhere I can and be very long-winded, so I'm glad you like it!

Honestly, I have no idea how to make things scary - I really just don't, it never seems scary enough to me - so I'm really happy that it seems that way!

Thank you very much for this lovely, lovely review and sorry about the (incredibly) late response!

Aph xx


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