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Review:DracoFerret11 says:
Hello again! Sorry for the delay between reviews!

Grammar/Spelling: Okay, I figured that I would mention that you have quite a few grammar and spelling errors throughout this chapter. The one that occured the most was the issue of using "there" instead of "their." Maybe have someone beta-read this?

Characterization: Well! I think it's interesting that you're portraying Harry with a lot of anger problems. That makes a lot of sense after all he's been through. And I really like how you're portraying Hermione. I liked the moment when she realized that Ron might be justified in not returning to Hogwarts. And Draco! WOW. He just LOST it, didn't he? That was really shocking. I couldn't imagine him really losing his temper like that, but it definitely still made sense in the story.

Descriptions: I loved how you wrote the fight between Draco and Hermione. It was very dramatic. Other than that, you can amp up your other descriptions to bring this story to life more.

Emotions: I think you did a good job emphasizing Hermione's impatience with Ron, as well as her frustration with having to spend time with Draco. And it seems like you really have a good idea of where Hermione's feelings are going with her coping with the war and now having to deal Draco's memory loss.

Plot: Well! I'm really excited to see how things go after this. I love that things are picking up and that Hermione's situation is changing. You really handled the ending of this chapter well. It was awesome. Well done.

Interactions: Loved when Hermione was taunting Draco earlier in the chapter. That was so clever. :D And I think the ending was terrific. The fight between them was crazy, as I keep mentioning. Well done!

I think you have a very good basis here and I can't wait to see where it goes next. This was quite well written. I'll read more soon.


Author's Response: Thanks for the review :)
Im really happy that you are starting to get into the story :)
Im hoping that the rest (so far) will keep your interest peaked :)

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