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Review:WitnesstoitAll says:
I hardly noticed that this chapter was over 7K words long... Literally, Missy, I got to the end and was like, "what?, no, moreee." I know it's been a while since you updated and I know this chapter gave you troubles in it's earliest stages, but this was a brilliant chapter, like, really really brilliant. Maybe even your best one yet. :) Since your formatting is so nice, I'm going to go scene by scene and comment on things because if not, you'd have a rubbish paragraph of rambling nonsense because there was so much good in this chapter.

I loved the opening scene with Remus and Sirius. Their dialoge was so easy, so sweet. And poor Remus. I just wanted to hug him, or cure his condition or something. I do wonder if his scars are from the same source here as in canon, I sort of assumed they did, especially with him being on such good terms with the Potions Lady. I really hope that their friendship continues to grow... it's really quite precious. I think this was my favorite passage from scene I: "There was royalty and purity in the blood that ran through his veins, but Sirius Black was still no more than a young boy of eleven, desperate for companionship in this stark, cold world that was so unlike his life of privilege. " It really sums the heart of sirius up into a nice neat package.

The third scene was equally enjoyable. I was so pleased that Sirius got to hear news from the castle... not knowing is worse than knowing, even if what you're knowing is bad. Also, I love that the thing that angers him the most is the fact that he was robbed of his chance to be king. I think that's an important emotion to have for where this story is going. My absolute favorite line in this entire chapter came from this scene: "My father used to tell me there was honor in death and that heaven was peaceful, beautiful, even. If thereís a world after ours of golden hills, sunshine, and nights where I can watch the stars for the rest of eternity, I donít think death would be all that bad." Omg. That was gorgeous. So, so gorgeous. -eternally jealous-

The scenes in the ballroom provided such a lovely contrast to the marauders in the wild. Cissy is so, so canon from her thoughts to her motivations to her mannerisms. Gah. And I was highly amused by Bellatrix's barefoot ensemble. lol. I think you are doing a fabulous job of moving the plot along while still managing to expose and develop a very large cast, so well done with that!

MOLLY. 'nuff said. She's amazing. I loved the little bit of backstory that you gave her and am so glad that you decided to go with her for scene four. He love for Regulus is so sweet, and I'm so thankful that the poor boy has her.

And finally, JAMESJAMESJAMES. Love him. I'm so glad that he and sirius had a moment, that he took care of sirius outside, that they too are going to be friends, b/c really. James/Sirius is one of my favorite friendships in the potter series.

Ugh. I'm sorry this is so long, but lksdjfaoiwjaoiewj there are just so, so many things that this made me think and feel and alkdfjsajf SUCH A BRILLIANT CHAPTER.

xoxo
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