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Review:Indigo Seas says:
You always leave such lovely reviews, so I thought I would try and leave a lovely review in return. This may be slightly less lovely than yours, simply because you're always a bit more eloquent than I find myself to be. :P

Anyway. This was just the sort of thing I needed to read. It was short, it was fluffy, it was just so... sweet. In the greatest, warmest sense of the word. It's such a simple thing that you're describing - lying next to someone while they're sleeping - and yet I can feel the love and affection she has radiating from every phrase you've crafted.

Sometimes I think it's hard to describe something that's so human, so normal. If that makes sense. It may be difficult to really capture the... I can't find the word I'm looking for. I dunno. What I'm trying to say is that you seem to have written the emotion perfectly, whatever that elusive emotion might be.

I hope I made any sort of sense. This was my favorite line: "He stirs, frowning slightly, and part of me panics. No, no, don’t, don’t leave, don’t end this." It's sort of a simple line, but I love the slight discomfort/panic she's feeling in it.

Anyway, this was really lovely. You've woven their history in without it being awkward, and your romance is just... very romantic (see what I mean about being more eloquent?).

xx Rin

Author's Response: Aww, Rin, thank you! :)

Sweet is definitely what I was going for, so that's great to hear. I really wanted to show pure love in the aftermath of something so tragic, and I wanted to do it in the simplest way possible, because that's how life can be. It sounds like I executed that well here, and that's really, really lovely to hear, so thanks!

Yes, I like that line, too - there is that slight sense of panic, that feeling that the moment is about to shattered and the "real" day is about to begin. I'm glad that it worked for you.

Thanks so much for this really kind review :)

-Amanda

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