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Review:MagicalInk says:
I'm speechless, but I guess I could still try and write.

This was a really beautiful one-shot. Your flow was sort of simple and smooth. There were no heavy words and metaphors swiftly introducing imagery to the story, it was simply wonderful.

Somehow, I felt as if I wasn't exactly there. I don't know how to explain this, but the way you used the third person made me feel as if I was flying around Minerva and her memories. But this isn't bad, as grief was palpable and Minerva was perfectly portrayed.

Speaking of, I loved your characterisation. We often see Minerva as the strict and boring lady, but people forget her motherly side we saw in the lat book. And you drawing such attention and care to that wa really sweet.
You also explored a relation with the marauders we don't often read and I'm sure existed. Each marauder ha it's own suffering and portrait that was heart wrenching and I loved the fact that she still thought of Sirius with compassion after all his troubled life.

Your imagery is basically all done with metaphors but draws the picture beautifully and I don't know what else to say. Grief and frustration drowned me while reading this and you made me love and feel compassion for all the characters, including Peter because Minerva didn't know it was him and si her thoughts almost convinced me of it.

I know reviews are supposed to give you CC but it was so well written and all this (^) rambling shows how good of a writer you are. So I guess all CC I can give you is keep writing like in this one-shot, simple but lyric and touching.
Val

Author's Response: Hi Val,

Thank you for your kind words, you're so sweet. This was a bit of a different approach for me stylistically in terms of it being so simple and short. It's still imagery and emotion-heavy, which is something that I think I'm known for as an author, but not as elaborate as I'm used to writing.

Do you think it would have made more of an impact if it was written in a different point of view, like first or second? I admit that I don't particularly like writing in either so that's why I went with third, but it's something I can keep in mind for future fics if it's something that would help you relate more to the character.

McGonagall is definitely tough in my mind - she has to be in order to deal with the death of so many of her students, but she is still very motherly, I think. I would imagine it would be extremely difficult to not feel emotionally connected to your students if you've watched them grow up and then one by one lost them to a war.

Aw, Sirius. I couldn't have her hate him completely. I always have this image of him being charming and a bit reckless and it must have hurt them, to think he betrayed the Potters, but she still has sympathy for him, I think. I'm also glad Peter's part worked for you and made you feel for his character despite knowing the truth of the situation.

Reviews are supposed to give CC but I've been known to write quite a few gushing reviews too, so I don't mind. Thank you so much again for your review.


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