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Review:Arithmancy_Wiz says:
I was browsing through the Next-Gen list on TGS, looking for something to review, when stumbled across this. I am so very glad I did.

This is truly haunting, in all senses of the word. The mood you created is perfectly crafted. The cold wind, the dried leaves, the icy water. It all hints at something ghost-like and no longer of this world. But it's done subtly enough so that the ending is still a surprise. This piece is just dripping with atmosphere, all of it really, really well executed.

Even the crafting of the sentences was great. You had long, flowing ones, like "He watches her dance all the colours of the rainbow, her body twisting in perfect unison with the rain that dashes down around them." But then you punctuate them perfectly with short bursts of "She dances on" and "It is endless." It just added to the atmosphere of slight un-reality but without interrupting the flow.

I want to leave a longer review to better reflect who much I liked the piece, but I'm finding it hard to think of others ways to say how wonderful it is. I don't usually read angst, as it can be a bit sappy or indulgent at times, but this just hit the mark on all fronts. A great balance of sadness and melancholy and...freedom.

Author's Response: I really am struggling to find words to reply to this. You've pretty much said everything that I wanted people to say about this story. I really wanted this to be something very ethereal and haunting, a reality that is slightly skewed yet real. I was aiming at creating confusion but not so much that it would put people off. I hope that came across.

I'm so glad that you enjoyed this and that you picked up all those little things that I was hoping people would notice. Those last three words - sadness, melancholy, freedom - really sum up the story in my head and honestly, I don't even have words to explain how grateful I am that you used them.

Thank you so much for such a lovely review ♥

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