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Review:tangledconstellations says:
Oh, James :(

This chapter really does show how much he is disintegrating, and how hard he took the emotional blow. The tone of this chapter is entirely somber and really dark, and although it is sad I think you've done a fantastic job at showing how James is feeling. Such personal and deep emotions are often really difficult to portray because you don't want to underplay them or overplay them so they aren't convincing, but I feel like you've got a perfect balance here. I can really feel how obsessive and fixated James is, which is really heartwrentching.

I thought your inclusion of the newspaper clippings was a really good way to further tell the story. It kinda spiced it up a little bit, but the way you've interlaced it with the narrative too, so they speak for you in some places, proves that James is basing his life and his direction on what they say. And he shouldn't :( I think the fact that so much time has passed too is really quite shocking, but effective as well. Just as we haven't seen the time pass, I bet James hasn't either, being so fixed on his injury and how to act about it.

I'm going to say it again, but, I love the way you write. There's a kind of lightless, surreal atmosphere about this. The subtle reference to stars is really beautiful, such as when you talk about him wanting to 'fade out', and how he was 'golden'. It's really lovely, but then at the same time really striking that he is no longer a part of this celestial image, and he's disappearing fast from it.

This is really great so far, and I can't wait to read more. I just hope things look up for him.

Laura xxx

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