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Review:NaidatheRavenclaw says:
Hi Missy! Here with your requested review! I'm basically terrified to leave this because your writing is as close to flawless as you can get and I'm not going to be able to give you much (any) crit :3 This one shot is one of your best, I think, and a bit different for you as well. Your style tends to be a bit more description~heavy and elaborate, but I absolutely adored the simplicity of this. It helped the emotions come out more, to put it all in this short and simplistic style. Actually, I don't think simplistic is quite the right word for what you've done here. It's still beautifully written with all the stunning imagery and language of your other pieces, but there's something so natural and real to the way you've told this that makes it easy to read and just...there are no words for how much I love this.

Your flow, too, was absolutely amazing. Your sentences fit together in ways few other authors can manage. It's almost poetic, the way you use the sentence structures and lengths to your advantage. I loved how you broke it up with the numbers. It was almost like a drumbeat in the background with all these lovely flowing sentences on top. I mean, sentences like this- This was the culmination of years of lies and deceit, woven into a mask so perfectly worn that no one had even suspected Sirius. - are just perfect. I can't even begin to think of how I could point out flaws in them.

Your characterization of Minerva was one of the best I've ever seen, and I've read quite a few Minerva fics. It was a different side to her and her relationship with the Marauders, but I really loved it all the same. I think a lot of people see her as a hardened soldier, but she was so tender in this. People sometimes forget everything she's been through, but you captured it perfectly. That had to be a difficult time for everyone who knew the Marauders, to effectively lose them all in such a short stretch of time. And your lines about Sirius's betrayal were fantastic as well. It was worse than death, in a way, because at least closure accompanies death. At least when someone dies, you know that they're gone. But Sirius was still alive, and so it's harder to get over in a way. You managed to capture all of that in a few sentences. This is why you're one of my favorite authors on the site.

Sorry this was really unhelpful and all that. This one shot was basically perfect and I hope you don't mind that I just squeed all the way through this review :P Stunning work as always.


Author's Response: Hi Naida! Psh, don't be terrified. I love receiving reviews from you, no matter what they say. :) Yes, this was definitely a bit different for me stylistically in terms of simplicity, but I thought it would be the most effective and I'm glad you agreed!

I did play around with the sentence structure to help with the flow, so I love that you picked up on that. I've seen a few people make that comment about the numbers, like a drumbeat, or counting, and that's sort of what I had in my head. Well, more like bells tolling but it's sort of the same basic idea.

Eee, thank you. Minerva...I'm always so terrified to write her because there are just some characters in canon that are distinct, you know? And it's difficult to get into their heads and I just want to please people and have my characterizations be good enough. So when I get compliments like that, it's seriously such a huge ego boost, so thank you.

I love what you said about death bringing closure, but with Sirius's betrayal you don't get that, and I think that's sort of what digs in and festers like a wound that won't heal. Just, everything about the Marauders era is tragic, the way it ended and I can't even begin to understand how anyone who had known that group (how REMUS) even survived.

Um, I love squeeing and you are just so fabulous, so thank you. This was a lovely review to find. :)

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