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Review:WitnesstoitAll says:
Hey!! First let me apologize how dreadfully long this has taken me to review. First JunNo and then some internet troubles really managed to get in the way. But here I am at last!!

This was a great chapter! I'm continually amazed as how natural you make the second person sound. I struggle to maintain it for a short story, and here you are with a very well executed novel. -drowning in jealousy- :) You had said in your request that you were primarily concerned about the realism of you characters, and I'd like to tell you not to fret. I adore this cast that you've constructed. Molly is wonderfully three dimensional and the supporting cast is growing, too!! I really liked all the little details that you've included here that make your hogwarts corridors and classrooms feel like real places full of people. I think too often, people forget that characters outside of their MCs exist -- but not you! Your school feels very full and vibrant. I especially loved the inclusion of Professor Patil (Padma, I'm guessing?) and the inclusion of the charms lesson. It sounded so fun! I adore when stories set at Hogwarts actually feature their characters attending lessons and studying and such, because in my experience, there is more of that in school then anything else. Some stories feel like eternal weekends/holidays, but again, this feels very real.

The scene at the end was very cute! I approve of ship prefect!! :)

Great chapter, and again, sorry for the wait!
Melissa

Author's Response: It's fine, don't worry about it - I know sometimes RL drowns people ;)

Thanks! I'm pretty much making it up as I go along, so I'm so glad to hear that you think it's going all right. Haha, don't drown in jealousy - I had no idea how to even use it before I decided I would do it for an entire novel O.o

Thanks again! I love Molly to pieces - she's absolutely taken on a life of her own now (I'm currently writing chapter 12) and it's pretty cool. I know! I hate it when it seems like there's only a select group of students at Hogwarts, and no classes or homework or tests or anything. And yep, Professor Patil is Padma ;) I always have to include a canon 'Claw or two, just for fun! It took me so long to find a charm which they study in fifth year, though... but I think it paid off! :D

Haha, I'm glad it has your approval! ;) He will turn up again, never fear!

Thank you so so much for this review - it was very lovely! :D

Aph xx


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