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Review:Bluestreakspirit says:
...WHAT. JUST. HAPPENED. Please excuse me while I have my jaw reattached to my face; it fell off around the point where I realized that Anya wasn't actually drunk in the hallway. HOLY MOTHER OF TOAST. THIS WAS JUST INSANE. I CAN'T EVEN HANDLE IT BECAUSE IT'S SO INSANE.

That was completely mad. I think it was very out of character for both Anya and Al. I previously didn't see Anya as the type of girl to take off her clothes at the drop of a hat, but I guess I was wrong. Al was a total git also. He let his effing roommates ogle the girl he just shagged - in her underwear on his bed. And then he told them that they shagged. And then he made one of his roommates take her away. What. The. Hummus.

The whole paragraph of transitioning from "saving Anya" to "having sex" was really rushed. They totally didn't have any reason to do it, and it showed. They didn't have enough sexual tension, they were both completely in their right minds - heck, Al was possibly still even thinking about Olivia - and I'm pretty sure that was both their first times. It didn't make sense to me.

I hope I don't offend you with any of this! I just felt it was not up to your usual standards at all.
-Cat

Author's Response: I don't really know what happened either and I thought that the people who read might be a bit shocked but I'm going to try and justify it...

Pretty much part of the reason I did it was because it was so unlike them (although I'm gunna let on that it isn't their first time). It's the whole idea of love making you do crazy things. Plus I just felt as if I needed to add in a bit of the crazy. It won't be something they do again but it will give them something to think about... It wasn't a planned moment.

It wasn't actually part of the story plan but it felt right to me so I just went with the flow...

I'm going to go away and re-read it and maybe if it is really really bad then i'll just delete it and re-write the chapter...

Alice

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